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Nagasarete Airantou:

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043 --------------------------------------------------------------------------------- girl-a: oooh, they're big!! beef: moo(h) girl-b: you did good for a beginner! --------------------------- girl-a: the big ones like these can't be found unless you dived really deep side chapter Even a woman diver bara: that scallops look tasty girl-b: later shi: well, my mother trained me hard long ago --------------------------- shi: and once in a while in the middle of the training sometimes I found myself swimming at the River of Dead mutter: hahahaha shimutter: oooh, ancestor!? ancestor: hey hey, you're too fast to come here girl-a: that's not something we can laugh at... 044 --------------------------------------------------------------------------------- girl-a: then let's have a race to make this all more fun? girl-b: oooh, a race, it's been some time since we have one. you're in Shinobu? shi: that's nice, I like to compete-degozaru --------------------------- girl-a: then, the time limit is until evening, the one catch the biggest is the winner girl-b: and the winner can take all the catches shi: umu, got it! --------------------------- girl-a: then, begin!! --------------------------- girl-a: fufufu... no way a beginner can win against us when we serious girl-b: we're sorry Shinobu, even if you have more lung power, we know the best points to find catches better 045 --------------------------------------------------------------------------------- shi: ...or so they think, but you're too optimistic : ninja have their eyes and noses trained well-degozaru --------------------------- shi: looks like here is the secret spot : lots of big catches here-degozaru --------------------------- shi: ooo(h) what a big abalone-degozaru!! : if I brought this time, I'm sure shishou will give a pat!! --------------------------- shi: yosh, I got it(h) : hn? --------------------------- shi: I sense something...? 046 --------------------------------------------------------------------------------- girl-a: how's the result? girl-b: these are mine, and yours Ran? --------------------------- ran: here are they, and Shinobu? girl-b: she is still diving --------------------------- ran: maybe she got lost again? girl-b: ahahaha, in the sea? that impossible beef: moo ran: she might be!! girl-b: let's find her!! 047 --------------------------------------------------------------------------------- shi: eeey, you damn squid!! : what so sudden-degozaru!? --------------------------- shi: uhyaa!? : where are you touching!! --------------------------- shi: pfft! sfx: nyuru : buhyahahaha, I'm weak at there-degozaru!! --------------------------- shi: phuaah! I can't seem to get loose...!! : I can't stand any longer than this...!! 048 --------------------------------------------------------------------------------- shi: then!! : I'll take this squid forcedly to the boat, it shall be mine!! --------------------------- shi: ninjutsu!! : Eight direction Shadow!! (kage no happoujin) --------------------------- shi: uooooo!! --------------------------- shi: kuh, it won't move even with 8 people!! : don't give up!! : shishou won't give up that easily!! 049 --------------------------------------------------------------------------------- shi: yeah!! We won't lose!! :degozaru --------------------------- ran: haa haa... it's no good. I couldn't found her.... beef: mooo! girl-b: me too... I didn't know Shinobu was that fool not to know which one the surface and which one the floor of the sea... --------------------------- shi: and who is you calling a fool~~~ beef: moo! both: a, a ghost!! --------------------------- shi: Don't kill me already-degozaru both: hahaha, we're glad you're safe 050 --------------------------------------------------------------------------------- shi: see this-degozaru both: ooooo what a size!! --------------------------- ran; you caught it bare handed.... shi: hahahaha, this contest is mine! girl-b: ? --------------------------- girl-b: but Shinobu shi: ? what-degozaru? --------------------------- girl-b: why you caught ikuto-kun also? shi: ooo shishou!? i: I still haven't lost... squid: he really were persistent... box: that time Shinobu learned from her master that sometimes one should held his hates to lose because it might get himself into dangerous... box2: the squid caught on Shinobu to escape from Ikuto's bait su: Ikuto where are you ton: puu ---------------------------

Illya:

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Page 02-03 Title: Chapter 6 * There are two options...? Page 04 Illya: Rin-san! Miyu: Wa- Miyu: Wait Illyasviel! Miyu: Ah... Illya: Havaaa!? Illya: Wha... What are you doing!? Illya mutter: That hurt!! Miyu: So... Sorry. But we can't approach so recklessly...! Page 05 Illya: Bu-but Rin-san and Luvia-san are...! Ruby: Calm down Illya-san! Ruby: I'm detecting life signals! It's alright. Those two are still alive! (This doesn't seem to fit with the idea of a Mahou Shojo manga) Illya: In that case we should hurry and heal... Miyu: That's why! Miyu: Composure. Reliability. Miyu: Conduct should be... Illya: Miyu-san... Page 06 Miyu: ... first of all, we have two options. Miyu: We defeat the enemy immediately or Miyu: we secure their escape once we get a chance Illya: How about that spear? Illya: If we use it to get a one hit kill... Miyu: No good... I can't use it at the moment. Sapphire: After using INCLUDE on a card, that card can't be used for a few hours. Ruby: That sounds like an evil limitation no matter how you say it. (Odd sentence here) Sapphire: We have tried out the card [RIDER] but... We didn't understand the meaning of the substance. (Very odd use of a chemistry term here.) Sapphire: [CASTER] is unknown... Testing it out so suddenly is far too risky. Ruby: Basically [ARCHER] would be useless... I feel that the second option is the only one. (Sentence is sort of vague here) Page 07 Miyu: ...I will draw out the enemy. Miyu: Illyasviel will approach along the right side hiding behind the trees and secure those two. Miyu: Immediately escape from this space from there. Miyu: Understand? Illya: Ye... Yes! Page 08 Sapphire: Luvia-sama and Rin-sama are far too close to the enemy. Miyu: So I can't shoot a big shot/blast... Miyu: It's not moving from that spot... Is it using them as bait...? Miyu: In any case I'll have to... Miyu: Draw out the enemy! Miyu: SHOOT!! Page 09 Sapphire: The enemy is unharmed. The attack did not reach...! Miyu: The mist blocked it? What is that thing... Miyu: No. That doesn't matter. Miyu: What I have to do now is... Miyu: Buy time to rescue them! Miyu: SHOOT!! Illya: What's going on? Is she reflecting it off the ground again... Ruby: Nope. It appears that you can't use magic against it. That black mist is... Could it be... Page 10 Miyu: Wha... Page 11 Miyu: Guh... Miyu: The barrier... It passed through! Illya: Miyu-san!? Page 12 Ruby: The enemy noticed us! Illya: Eh Ruby: Run away! It'll also... Illya: Kyaaa!! Page 13 Illya: Auu...! Illya: That hurt...! Illya: Ah... Ahh... My arm... Blood...! Ruby: It's alright! It's just a minor injury! I'll restore it quickly! Miyu: Sapphire... That black thing is...!? Sapphire: No doubt about it. That is... Sapphire: A unbelievably dense (Not exactly sure what she meant here) Sapphire: mist made of magical energy/mana! Page 14 Sapphire: That abnormally high region of magical energy/mana is deflecting the blasts of magical energy/mana. Miyu: Even that is magical energy/mana huh... We can't render that magic barrier...! (The first part is hard to intepret properly) Illya: It's coming! Get up Illya-san!! Illya: U... Au... Miyu: What are you doing!? Miyu: Hurry up and get away!! Ruby: Illya-san! Illya: Ah...! Miyu: Illyasviel!! Page 15 Illya: Hiah!!? Miyu: That's...! Illya: Huh...? Page 16 Illya: Rin-san! Luvia-san! Rin: Kuh... We got that black armor...! Luvia: Miyu! Put some distance and regroup once more...! Rin: It didn't even... Rin: Slow it down!? Miyu: Sapphire!! Sapphire: Physical barrier at maximum!! Page 17 Miyu: ...h!! Illya: Kyah!? Page 18 Illya: Mi... Miyu-sa... Miyu: I'm fine. Rather than me, the enemy... Ruby: This is bad, isn't it... Ruby: This is an especially formidable opponent. Ruby: Magical energy/mana blasts and magic have no effect. Ruby: It's capable of Long distance and Short distance battle Ruby: Our advantage was completely overturned right in front of us. A straight ball down the middle... (Seems to be a baseball metaphor. I do not know a thing about baseball) Ruby: That thing is the ultimate enemy. Page 19 Illya: Ultimate... Miyu: Her fighting spirit... She's losing it Miyu: Isn't this too unreasonable... The worst possible situation Miyu: This thing's basic abilities is completely different from the enemies up till now. Miyu: Defeating it is impossible let alone evacuation... (Could be the other way around) Illya: Rin-san!! Rin: Haa Rin: Haa Rin: Haa Rin: This is really bad... Luvia: Kuh...! Page 20 Illya: Wha... What do we do Ruby!? What should we do!? Ruby: Obububu Miyu: Calm down! Don't panic! Miyu: I'll cling to the enemy and keep it busy! You take that chance to rescue... Illya: W-we can't! That's what we tried just now! Miyu: The physcial barrier will last for ten or so seconds at maximum! Illya: I said we can't! That put's you in serious danger... Ruby: Nmmmmm Ruby: Finishing move! Illya: Adaa!? Ruby: RUBY DUAL CHOP!! Miyu: Haguu!? Page 21 Illya: Owww...! Wh-what are you doing at a moment like this!? Ruby: You two shouldn't be fighting! Ruby: Honestly! That's not how you become splendid Magical girls! (Hmmm... That could turn into a debate actually) Illya: Bu-but! Ruby: I know. Ruby: At this rate there's no way to win... that's why... Ruby: Is that alright Sapphire-chan? Sapphire: Yes, Nee-san. Miyu: Huh...? Ruby: Our last resort. Page 22 Rin: Wa... Rin: It's coming to finish us off... It sees us as obstacles? Rin: It shouldn't be able to reason. You're an unpleasantly calm enemy you know that. Luvia: My jewels are also out... Luvia: Kuuh. At such a place...! Illya: Rin-san!! Luvia-san!! Rin: Idiot! Get back!! RIn: You two can't beat this thing!! Illya: Can't beat it... We can't even rescue them... Illya: That's why-! Page 23 Saber: ...h!? Illya: We'll take... Illya: Option no. 3! Page 24 Ruby: Seriously... You two are so troublesome. You didn't even weep when you were abandoned. This time is a one-time special. (There's a phrase in the dictionary that says "shinobinaku" means to weep. It makes more sense than "sneaking into" in this context) Rin: Well said. I'm glad we've got that cleared up from the beginning (Not quite sure if I got their interaction right) Sapphire: You have been acknowledged as "Guest' for the period of an hour. ... reluctantly that is. Luvia: What's with that attitude... This was the original form wasn't it. Page 25-26 Rin: Well then. Why don't we get started.

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Freezing:

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Bridgette: Alright Pg. 8-9 Bridgette: Preparations >> Complete Pg. 10 Nice Guy: What the fuck is with this guy...? >> Hey faggot... Nice Guy: What the fuck are you doing~!? >> You wanna die!? Pg. 11 Aoi: I won't forgive you... Aoi: You've not only endangered the lives of my friends, but... >> you'd even go so far as to cruelly taunt Hiiragi-san... Aoi: Absolutely!! >> Unforgivable!! Pg. 12-13 Aoi: U...!! >> Uaaaaa!! Rana (text): ...!! Rana: The "Tears of Kunlun" are... trembling!! >> What is this sensation!? Pg. 14 Glasses: Ugh... Glasses: What? What the hell... my body... >> Shit... I can't move!!! Nice Guy: Me too... >> I can't move a muscle in my entire body! Hiiragi (text): Aoi-kun... >> used "Freezing"...? Hiiragi (text): However, even the atmosphere around him is being affected... >> and it continues to branch off in every direction... Pg. 15 Hiiragi: That's not all, everyone within its vascinity is unable to move an inch...!! **With the exception of their mouths** >> Is such an ultra-high density "Freezing" actually feasible!? Glasses: Uugh... >> Step... back...! Glasses: Step the fuck back!! >> You monster Kei!!!! Pg. 16 Arthur: K-Kazuya!! Aoi: Arther... Arthur: ...!? >> Kazuya!! Pg. 17 Arthur: K-Kazuya!! >> Get a grip!! >> Kazuya!? Nice Guy: ! >> I can move!? Nice Guy: Fuck it >> I'll kill all of you!! Nice Guy: You...!! >> You bitch!! Pg. 18 Nice Guy: Ka... haa... Pg. 19 Rana: Do you... >> still plan to fight ~de arimasuka? Arthur: Kazuya!! >> C'mon open your eyes! Kazuya!! Rana: I'll accompany Hiiragi-san ~de arimasu! Rana: Arthur!! >> You need to hurry and take him to a hospital ~de arimasu!! Pg. 20 Arthur: I need to contact the academy immediately! >> We have to get him to the special treatment facility! Rana: Academy...? Arthur: West Genetics!! Rana: ...!! Arthur: That's the specific academy that we're affliated with!! Box: Recovery Room Pg. 21 Elder (text): Never forget, Rana... Elder: The "Tears of Kunlun" dwells within your body... >> There will definitely be a time in your life where you will befriend your soulmate. Rana: A time where I'll befriend my soulmate ~de arimasuka...? Elder: That's correct. There is no man in our village that resonates with your "Tears of Kunlun," but... Elder: This world is vast... You should travel to the place which houses people who hold something similar to your "Tears of Kunlun" >> That place is called "Genetics" >> However, if you do go there, you will also encounter your soulmate... Pg. 22 Elder: A man who is able to make your "Tears of Kunlun" tremble and who is able to paralyze all flithy beings with his virtuous will >> In other words, that man is your soulmate... Rana (text): A man who is able to make my "Tears of Kunlun" tremble... >> who is able to paralyze flithy beings by his will... Rana: At last, I've met... >> that man ~de arimasu...!! Pg. 23 Bridgette: C'mon! >> It's already an hour passed the time we promised!! Pg. 24 Bridgette: ...!? ???: Satellizer-sempai >> Are you there...? Pg. 25 Bridgette: Wait. I'm opening the door right now. Bridgette: Jeez... >> How long were you planning on making a person wait!! Bridgette: ...!? Arthur: Ah... I don't mean to bother you so late, but... >> There is something urgent I need to inform you about... Pg. 26 Arthur: Kazuya is hospitalized in the academy's recovery room. >> I heard that today was going to be your "first time," so I thought that you might of been waiting here. Pg. 27 Rana: Are you... Bridgette: Where's Kazuya? Rana: You're Kazuya-san's friend ~de arimasuka? Rana: Don't worry ~de arimasu. Kazuya-san is going to be wake soon ~de arimasu! >> In just a bit, we'll be able to see him. Let's wait here together until then ~de arimasu. Bridgette: Wait... together with you? Bridgette: Why are you waiting...? Rana: ...! Pg. 28 Rana: I am Rana Linchen... Rana: Kazuya-san's... >> soulmate ~de arimasu. Bridgette: What...? Rana: Kazuya-san is my soulmate. >> He is the only man who is able to resonate with my "Tears of Kunlun" ~de arimasu. Pg. 29 Rana: That's why I'm here protecting his hospital room from danger... >> As he is my soulmate, you could say it's natural I'm acting this way ~de arimashou. Bridgette: What... >> are you... Bridgette: Are you a student here...? >> Are you a Pandora...? Rana (text): What's with this person ~de arimasuka? >> Suddenly emitting a murderous intent... Rana: This place is referred to as "Genetics" ~de arimasuka? >> To answer you exactly, it would be, "Not yet" ~de arimasu. Pg. 30 Rana: Starting tomorrow, I will be enrolled as a transfer student to Genetics Academy ~de arimasu. >> If you are also a student here, then I hope we get along in the future ~de arimasu. Bridgette (text): ...!! Arthur: ! Arthur: Uwaa! Satellizer-sempai!! >> You're already here!? Arthur: R-Rana-san, let's talk over here for a moment~ Rana: Huh? I can't ~de arimasu. Kazuya-san will be waking up soon ~de arimasu Arthur: C'mon it'll over really quick!! Hiiragi really wants to thank you! Rana: U-Umm... Pg. 31 Bubbles: ... >> ...! Bridgette (text): ...! Bridgette: U-Umm... Female Doctor: Oh? The untouchable queen, right? What kind of business do you have here? Bridgette: How is... >> Kazuya Aoi's condition...? Female Doctor: ... Pg. 32 Female Doctor: Is that how it is... >> The untouchable queen wants to go in, huh...? Bridgette: T-That's not true!! Female Doctor: I understand. Enter. Bridgette: ...! Female Doctor: You came to see him, right? What if I say he's next to the wall? Pg. 33 ALL TEXT Bridgette: That's good... >> It looks like his life isn't in danger... Bridgette: Kazuya Aoi... >> You are... the first ally I've made here... Pg. 34 Hiiragi: Huh... then Rana-san was actually transfer student to here? >> I didn't know that... Rana: Yes, I was instructed by the elder >> to search for my soulmate at Genetics ~de arimasu. Hiiragi: Pardon my asking, but... what's this "Tears of Kunlun"? Rana: Ah, allow me to show you ~de arimasu. Rana: This is the "Tears of Kunlun" Pg. 35 Hiiragi: Aren't those stigma!? Wow... and six of them at that!! >> Rana-san is a Pandora, huh? Rana: ? Rana: Pandora? What's that ~de arimasuka? Hiiragi: Eh...? Well... Hiiragi: To put it simply, it means it was obvious that Rana-san would come here. >> So then, your soulmate would be a Limiter then. Rana: Limiter ~de arimasuka? Hiiragi: The 2nd year students here, that is, those with mature stigmas partner together with 1st year students in a ceremony we call a "baptism." Afterwards, they can then fight together as a pair. >> In Rana-san's case, this applies to what you have been calling soulmate. If you enter this academy, sooner or later you'll meet him. Rana: ... Pg. 36 Rana: My partner has... >> already been decided ~de arimasu. Rana: Kazuya Aoi! >> There's no one other than him who could be my soulmate ~de arimasu! Hiiragi/Arthur: ... Hiiragi: T-This is bad...! Rana: Eh? Why ~de arimasuka? Arthur: I don't think it's possible... Arthur: Eh... you could say that Kazuya can no longer form a pair... Rana: ... Arthur: You could say he already has an owner... Pg. 37 Rana: Are you trying to say that Kazuya-san already has a soulmate ~de arimasuka? Arthur: That is... you see I've meant to say this before... Arthur: You met her in the corridor earlier... >> Her name is Satellizer-sempai... Rana: ...!? Female Doctor: Interesting... >> How very interesting... One-eyed Doctor: What are you looking so excitedly at, ERIZU? **ERIZU is a name in katakana that still needs to be translated** One-eyed Doctor: What? Suddenly... (text) >> Here coffee ERIZU: You came at just the right time, Yumi. Take a look at this... Pg. 38 ERIZU: Kazuya Aoi's analysis data! Yumi: ...!? ERIZU: As expected of Kazuha Aoi's little brother... >> If this is all true, then it would explain why he is able to use "Freezing" without both a baptism and an "Ereinbar Set." Next Chapter: Lots of LOL-text, no joke. (Stigma Body)

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